My father is 47 old. He is strong and active.Her favourite season is winter. Because he can make a snowman. her favourite food is apple.I like my father.

My father is 47 old. He is strong and active.Her favourite season is winter. Because he can make a snowman. her favourite food is apple.I like my father.
水平与要加强

有许多错的地方。。。。。。。。。

加油。。。。。。。。。。。

是，爸爸是男的，应该用he 和his

水平有待提高。。。。。

慢慢来 不急  只要坚持有这种写的意识 相信会做的更好

My father is 47 old. He is strong and active.His favourite season is winter. Because he can make a snowman. His favourite food is apple.I like my father.
老师帮你修改了 ，不错，你是一个很好的 孩子，多练笔就会进步很快的！

My father is 41,he is very fat.